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Title: Could someone suggest anything to improve on my review?
Post by: Autosaver on December 27, 2010, 09:20:02 pm
http://forums.sega.com/showthread.php?3 ... ements-%29 (http://forums.sega.com/showthread.php?355516-Sega-All-Stars-Racing-Review-%28Please-help-find-errors-Improvements-%29)

That is my review.

I'm wondering if anyone could point out flaws or just something I could add to make it better.
Title: Re: Could someone suggest anything to improve on my review?
Post by: Wilhelm on December 28, 2010, 06:19:48 pm
More Periods than there should be. Could just be your style of writing.

Try using ;
They are useful.