Author Topic: Could someone suggest anything to improve on my review?  (Read 1592 times)

Offline Autosaver

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Could someone suggest anything to improve on my review?
« on: December 27, 2010, 09:20:02 pm »
http://forums.sega.com/showthread.php?3 ... ements-%29

That is my review.

I'm wondering if anyone could point out flaws or just something I could add to make it better.
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Offline Wilhelm

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Re: Could someone suggest anything to improve on my review?
« Reply #1 on: December 28, 2010, 06:19:48 pm »
More Periods than there should be. Could just be your style of writing.

Try using ;
They are useful.
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